Personal Statement Revise

Order Description PS: Base on the Red color highline, outline, comment, suggestion and a idea of example answer. Please revise it. Thank you. Only revise “My answer” as a essay. PS: Each response is limited to a maximum of 350 word. A few tips: •Use your own voice: Your answers should reflect your ideas and be written by you alone. Don't be afraid to talk about yourself in the first person (for example, "I" and "my"). •There are no right or wrong answers to these questions. It's about getting to know you in your own unique voice. •Proofread and edit: Although this is not an essay or a writing test, make sure to check your work. Grammatical and spelling errors can get in the way of what you're trying to communicate. Formatting your answers 1.Because of the 30-minute time limit in place on each page of this application, we recommend that you compose and save your answers using a text editing program such as MS Word, Google Docs, Notepad or Textedit, then copy and paste them into the form fields. 2.Use only standard American English alphanumeric characters (numbers 0 through 9 and letters a through z) and the other characters found on a standard English keyboard: ! @ # $ % ^ & * ( ) _ + - = [ ] { } | ; : ' " , < . > / ? excluding ~ . Do not use smart quotes, accented characters or foreign language characters as they will be replaced with ASCII character substitutions. 3.Save and reread your answers to make sure you caught any issues.