In "The Word Weavers/The World Makers,"

In "The Word Weavers/The World Makers," Postman suggests that "definitions, questions, [and] metaphors" are "three of the most potent elements with
which human language constructs a worldview." Who gets to define the world for whom? What are the consequences of this? What is the relationship
between language and power?
This is the teacher comments on what to change in order to pass. Please try to satisfy the teacher request.
There are many good things in this intro. You're introducing two authors and setting up your big ideas. As you revise, make sure that you're introducing three
authors, and introduce each one thoroughly. Focus less on biographical information and more on the argument being put forward by each writer.
Right now, you don't seem to have a thesis. As you revise, zero in on a thesis that synthesizes the arguments of your texts and also states your own position.
Here are some questions to consider: What do you think about the role of schooling in identity-formation? Would you argue for a common language that
spans cultures or would you argue for a multiplicity of languages? What's lost and gained each way